5 Interesting phrases…
1 1) Weevil-Wobbles
but he won’t fall down!!!
2 2) Like
Ducks in a row…
3 3) Context
and Sub-context: What goes up…(must come
down)
4 4) What’s
this country coming too??
5 5) Sarcasm: Awe I’m sorry…
6 6) There’s
nothing more I can do…
7 7) I
bet my dad can beat up your dad…
Ideas for a script…
3). Context and
Subcontext: What goes up…(must come
down)
(Synopsis)
1).
A man is laying sprawled out in the street in a fairly nice suit, he looks
a little roughed up. In his head he is
thinking of how he got into this situation. The camera is angled overhead with
a slow zoom.
The Narration begins John:
Ya
know something…theres days I wake up and wonder why I’m about to do any of the shit
I actually do. It’s mainly the reason
why I feel like crap. Today was
different though. Today wasn’t normal. Today I felt good, which didn’t make
sense. I didn’t care that Sharon was on
my ass about bills or getting a real job that matter to her pretentious side of
the family. I didn’t care that I owed a couple of loan sharks for some bad bets
and got threatened with a stapler to my balls.
Nah….for some reason, I didn’t care…and I knew today was just going to
be a bad day….
2). He recalls listening to his wife yell at him
earlier that morning. As he was simply getting ready to go to work
that morning, during his routine and remaining silent as his wife is berating him
in the background. He looks at himself
in the mirror.
Sharon:
I don’t even know why I stay with you. My mother was right, MY Father was
right! Why am I even here anymore, you
never listen! What the hell do you plan
on doing today, going and gambling all day at the bar again! You know your
about useless, I should hook up with that Bobby Reynolds you’re always pissed
off and jealous of.
(Narration)
John: (Looking at himself in the
mirror)
There wasn’t really much that Sharon could say to
me that would really get me angry. That’s
all she ever wanted to do was just argue.
It was her way of making me buy her new shit to keep her happy. She was just a trophy wife, with a couple of
rich loaded old folks who didn’t know what they were really worth. It wasn’t worth trying to fight with her on
any issue. There isn’t any love in this marriage,
she knows it too, it’s just too easy to manipulate the poor girl’s head. Everyone needs a safety blanket and this was
mine.
3).
John begins walking down the street and continues his narration. He is walking through an alley to get to the
back door of an old building to play in an illegal card game. In his wallet he’s got only fifty dollar
bill. Several shady guys are sitting
around a table. A man named Michael
speaks first
Mike:
Ah! Johnny Boy!
So nice of you to join us so late!
Hurry in and annie up, first game we’re playin is seven card draw, no
looking. Usual buy in $50.
John:
Well I’m ready to win some money, get ready to
clean out your pockets boys cause I’m taking you all for all you got!
4).
Johnny sits right in between two large men who both awkwardly turn to look at
him. A few hours go by and Johnny is
sitting with a stack of cash on the table next to him. He is reluctant and is trying to leave
without giving a bad impression, since everyone else at the table appears to be
a sore loser.
Mike:
You know Johnny I heard something about a week
ago from a bookie friend of mine. It was
the craziest thing. He said that some
scrawny, little polish guy has been going into his place in the evening, right before
he’s been trying to close. This guy
apparently has been winning pretty big and has been placing bets that turn out
to be duds and roll over
5).
Johns eyes begin to dart around the room.
Mike:
Yea it turns out that this guy owes my buddy
about a lil over 5 g in bad bets. Say
John…
6).
John knows where this is leading…the men around him are glaring at him, he
tries to back his chair up and stand only to be grabbed and forced to the
table. John is screaming for help, but
it is useless
Mike:
You know what that is Johnny that’s
stealing. My old man always told me that
stealing is wrong and that thieves need to be punished!
7).
John is roughed up in the alley and we see the other men walk off in the distance. John is laying on his back in the same
position as before in the same spot in the alley. He conveys his thoughts on trying to find a
way to get rich quick and how he just wants a life like a celebrity and be
famous for nothing.
John:
So here we are once again. All I ever wanted was a way to make a quick
buck and be on my own. I always wanted
to be famous for no good reason, I figure my face on the front page of the
newspaper tomorrow morning is about all I would get out of this town. Walked into the biggest gamblers den in the
city, with nothing but fifty bucks and came out over 5 grand ahead, just enough
to pay the scum bags off I needed to pay…Looks like they got their money and a
free ass whooping on top of it. All in
all, did I learn my lesson, (smiles at the camera, same angle from beginning)
Nahhh… I figure some days I have my ups and downs.
Roll credits
This has a lot of character in it. I can see the tone as I read the words. The phrase sets up the story but does not play in the scene. The scene with the wife is unnecessary. You can cut it and you still don't lose anything with the main storyline.
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